Feels more like hiphop than rock/metal
What I think about the track: It feels repetitive. The guitar doesn't bring the excitement of metal or rock'n'roll. The snare needs more velocity/weight into it. If you want to rock, you have to make heads bang; this didn't do it.
What I think should be done: Rework the guitar. Add a parallel note or two to give the riff more weight. You may also try to add guitar mutes. Now, what you have is <toot>-<space>-<toot>-<toot>. Try <toot>-<mute>-<mute>-<toot>-<toot>. The key here is to keep the adrenalin boiling. Add a bass guitar to add weight also.
Keep trying. :)